On Monday we had to do a narrative piece of writing. the prompt was the race I had just done a motor biking blog post so I did a motor biking blog post.
Zack's eyes concentrated on only one thing, the path in front of him he had to win this race he had practiced his whole life for at this moment. His family was struggling financially so they needed to get the money to pay their mortgage off. And keep their farm. It was a family generation farm so it's been through his whole family and now he cannot lose it. Boop Boop Boop. The race starts and Zack zooms off with the horde of motor bikes. At this point Zack is in 4th place he is up against the best motorbikes in the world so he has a competition. They have to do 35 laps to win the race. Zack is in 3rd place now he is doing well clank clunk ahhhh!!!! Zack fell off his bike luckily he wasn't hurt but it put him in 13th place so he jumped back on his bike and tried to catch up. He was catching up slowly at one point he got to 5th but then he went to 4TH!!! He had 5 more laps to catch up and he had a good mind set. So he was positive that he would win. 3 laps to go The crowd cheered as Zack was in 2 place. “ I have to win. Come on, I can do this. Have a good mindset” Zack said in his head. Last lap people the crowd was going crazy. Zack was trying his hardest to get to first. 10.
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Zack had overtaken the person on the last second he won that was a big help for his family.
His family was all proud of him that he won.
Hi Enzo,
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of writing, your punctuation is accurate and punctuation accurate it is based on a good story line.
Next time add a question to get the reader thinking.
Well Done!
Cool story Enzo! Very descriptive and great action, it was easy to imagine the story in my head! Keep up the awesome story's son I'm enjoying reading them!
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